It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Children learn as they grow but what? Are they learning things right or wrong? To avoid learning wrong teachers and parents should do something. Some of them think that
punishment
is a good
way
to get over
this
problem. On one hand,
Punishment
is a good
way
to teach children trues. If the
punishment
is implemented right and painless
way
,
then
it can be considered
as
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way
.
However
, as I said earlier it should be harmless both sentimentally and physically. It mustn’t harm the
child
,
that is
a really important point. For ,instance assume a
child
has broken a vase, there are two kinds of parents who perform
punishment
,
,
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one comes and yells directly to the
child
and gives him penalties like no more video games for
this
week, you are not going to leave your room until
next
week etc. The
second
family respond to
this
situation more tender and gives the
child
the same punishments but with smooth language. There is a distinction, the
first
child
learns the situation
besides
hate against their family,
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the
second
one learns the case and keeps going.
On the other hand
, treatment is a
way
too.
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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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