some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are arguments, that we should adapt to
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unsatisfactory
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or insufficient amount of money. There is
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because others claim we should try to improve these unpleasant conditions. In my essay, I am going to discuss both these views and give my own opinion. It can not be denied that not everything is going as we dreamed about it, including
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and
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of money we should live with. From one point of
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attempt to accept these conditions, because
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we may become greedy. In the eastern world, is thought, that doesn´t matter
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what we have to deal with, it is all about our mindset statement. We have to learn how to tackle
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issues and how to accept them
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because it is what life brings to us and it is our life way we should come through. From
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way how to become happy in whatever circumstances
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because it improves our human features.
On the other hand
, focusing on the nowadays western life generally described as mainstream, everyone is trying to put himself
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position, not just in the work, including higher income, but broadly speaking in every aspect of his existence. From
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house, two cars, holidays in
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and whatsoever else. If it is not achievable in the current occupation, we search
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elsewhere, until we succeed. Linked to
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way of thinking I agree at least partially. In a nutshell, from one point of
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we should try to adapt to present circumstances.
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of their happiness.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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