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Surveys show that many people believe most jobs in the future will be done at home.Do you agree or disagree ?

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It is argued that most organizations will prefer to work
from home
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 model.
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 essay agrees with the suggestion because of the benefits it will provide to the pupils.
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this
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 essay will discuss how an employee can save a lot of
time
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 working from home and the positive changes it will bring to a person's life,
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 we will see how
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 a revolution will be beneficial for the
companies
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. In today's world,
time
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 is the most important factor in a person's life. A person can save a lot of
time
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 from travelling, preparations etc.
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, many hassles
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 as driving or travelling through public transport will be reduced.
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 changes will bring comfort to human life.
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 people have some free
time
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 which they are spending with their loved ones.
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, as per the data released by the government, many people are enjoying working from the comfort of their homes which has a positive effect on their performance.
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,
companies
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 have gained profit because they are spending less money on employee management. Now
companies
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 don't have to rent offices to accommodate employees.
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, the expense of electricity, water and food is reduced.
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 increased in some areas, it is still cheap compared to the old model.
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, Wipro has reported a profit of 10M in the current financial year and the organization has given credit to the work from the model for its success. In conclusion, working from home is beneficial for bought employees and
companies
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.
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 essay suggests all
companies
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 adopt
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 method in the coming future because of the positive changes it brings
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 society.
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coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical structure, but it lacks a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
The essay partially addresses the task question, but it needs to provide a more comprehensive response and include relevant specific examples to support the arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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