Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

Earth
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Environments situation has worsened since the period of
industrial
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revolution. There were many activities that have damaged our ecosystem.
However
, the most impactful was the unexpected
increase
of greenhouse in our
earth
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atmosphere
As a result
,our modern society
were
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trying to salvage the situation
such
as inventing new kind of
energy
, regulations of automobiles, etc).
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this
essay will exhibit the cause and the
solution
of our
environment
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problem.
First
of all , The consequence of increasing greenhouse gases was the overall
increase
in
earth
temperatures.
Therefore
, created serious
problem
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problems
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such
as rising sea
level
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levels
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and damaging many
organisms
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organisms'
organism's
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habitat
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habitats
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.
Firstly
the
increase
in
earth
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temperature
have
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caused the ice glaciers around the
earth
to start melting.
Hence
, raising
up
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the sea level. Because of that, many
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coastal
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costal
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coastal
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area
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were destroyed.
Secondly
,
increase
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in
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the earth
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earth
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temperature
also
caused
the organisms habitat
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the organism's habitat
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to
altered
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.
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example
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drastic change in habitat temperature ,
as a
result
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risks many organisms going extinct.
Therefore
, inventing
new
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kind of
energy
was a necessity. Green
energy
is
a
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energy
many experts have agreed that it is a
solution
of
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combating environmental problems.
For instance
, green
energy
were
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not created any carbon emissions or toxic gases
into
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our environment.
In
addition
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the process of harvesting
this
kind of
energy
doesn’t do much
same
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the same
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to
it
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surroundings as well.
Thus
shifting our usage of our
energy
towards green
energy
will help ease the burden
from
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the environment. In conclusion, Even though the damage
of
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the ecosystem
were
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made and can’t be
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.
However
, we have found the
solution
to prevent them.
Thus
lies in
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the hand
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hand
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hands
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of the government to implement the
solution
and prevent it
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from
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form
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worsening.
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