Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that nowadays, the huge volume of sales can be regarded as influences that the advertisement

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on customers rather than their real demands. I generally believe that advertising control what

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been used by

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launching

their products and making a lot of efforts to present them.

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of all, firms have invested a huge amount of money to demonstrate what they want by putting them in front of people’s sight

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places like highways. Any individual may face

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at least a few posters of a product when

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traffic or while driving or walking. So, by

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they can be familiar with a good and may they want to give it a shot.

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, It is common

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to buy some

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that are useless. We are being affected by TV commercials that lead us to try a thing which we have

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heard

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watched almost

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, after a while we do not use them anymore as there were not of necessities.As a

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we help to increase the sales of a company by having a

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to find new things. In

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some people believe that advertising is not really strong and the statistics relevant to sales amount are an indicator of

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desire for a specific good, I feel that today advertising is a science that

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people since they

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highways and they are frequently shown on TV commercials to persuade people at least try their products for once.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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255 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consumer behavior
perceived need
lifestyle aspirations
brand image
prestige
psychological techniques
scarcity
social proof
celebrity endorsements
technological advancements
product innovations
emerging consumer needs

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

In a public-funded healthcare system, people who are willing to pay for the best and fast treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers , are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?