Topic: Some say that sports play an important role in society. Others think it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Do you agree or not?

Weekly
exericse
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exercise
has shown to be very
benefical
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beneficial
for one's health.
Sports
are a great
way
to improve our health in a fun
way
.
Moreover
, regular exercise has
shown
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to reduce the risk of many
illnese
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illness
illnesses
.
For instance
, a fit person is less at risk of getting a heart attack compared to somebody that does not
endulge
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indulge
in regular exercise.
In other words
, a society that takes part in regular
sprots
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sports
spots
is more healthy in comparison to one that does not.
Teamsports
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Team sports
such
as basketball are a great
way
to find friends. In summary,
this
essay has addressed the importance of
sports
in society. In my
opnion
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opinion
,
sports
are a not only great
way
to keep healthy
,
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but,
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they
also
help build
a communities
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a community
communities
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.
This
is why I believe that
sports
play an essential role in society.
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