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Some people buy new models of phones, computers and other technology. Why? Is this a good or bad thing?

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individuals
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they believe that new
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technology
 has more and more facilities.I believe,
this
 trend cuts both ways.
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mother
modern
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technology
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 old devices.
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Nowadays
,young people need
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new
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technology
.For
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instance
,they learn new things and they do
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different
 work
such
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searching
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work
 for their
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universities
.So,they should have new
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technology
 that
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 work.
In particular
,some students have special work and they have high salaries.So,they need to be up to date on technology.Despite the fact that
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they should pay a part of their salaries that buy new technology every year.So, they suffer from
this
 issue. I think that
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companies have to produce new parts that people can buy
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and they can use them in old
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devices
.As a consequence,they do not need to buy new
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technology
 and they can
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save
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money.
In addition
, new
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technology
 can bring both benefits and
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drawbacks
.But,
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 find they should use their old
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devices
 and every year buy new parts and add with them.
In addition
,when they buy cutting edge devices,they can use them for several years.
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