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Overpopulation in India is the main cause of poverty. Do you agree or disagree.?

#overpopulation #india #poverty
The diagram depicts how the discarded
glass
bottles
turns
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 into
a
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reusable item. It undergoes and uses three different processes. Overall, the three categories of processing
a
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wasted glasses
takes
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 different methods and ways. Littered
bottles
was
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 collected, cleaned up, and reproduce. Stage 1 commenced with
gathering
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a gathering
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 of
glass
bottles
then
 placed inside the collection point and transported by the aid of
truck
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. Meanwhile, bottle cleaning was done under high-pressure water and
segragated
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segregated
 according to its
color
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such
 as clear, green, and brown, These
glass
container
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containers
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kept
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were kept
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 inside the
glass
 factory and pulverized into pieces of
glass
, which
then
undego
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undergo
 burning in
furnace
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the furnace
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 at 600 degrees to 800 degrees
celcius
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.
Consequently
, both recycled
glass
 and new liquid
glass
then
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 shaped in
glass
 mould which completed
the
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stage 2. The process
then
 reaches
the
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stage 3, where the formed
glass
 bottle
introduced
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is introduced
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 to the supermarket. All new
bottles
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bottle
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 products are now ready for sale
..
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.
...
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