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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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both countries, the percentage of owned accommodation experienced a gradual increase, while the proportion of rented residential
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 of all, it is clear that in 1918, owned accommodation was almost 20%, and it remained stable in the years 1939 and 1953. From 1961 to 2001 owned housing went under a sharp rise. Following
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