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Pollution of air, water and soil has become critical=serious in last years and it takes millions of years to recoup. What are the main causes of pollution? How can we tackle this problem individually and globally?

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In the 21st century
pollution
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 is one of the major challenges facing
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the
word
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world
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 whereas human activity
are
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 situation.
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, years need to restore the habitat to make
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 place for fauna and flora. In
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 essay,I will explain what are the causes and will recommend some solutions for
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 subject. The adverse effect of globalisation and industrialisation brings enormous changes in
nature
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 through the adverse effects of
pollution
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,excessive growth of population demands more consumer goods which promote chemical products,
results
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 air and soil
pollution
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, According to the World Health Organisation 2020, Epidemiological statistics suggested that 75% of
most
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 populated
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cities
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 atmosphere contains harmful chemical molecules.
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, it
destroy
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 the rhythm of
nature
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.
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,
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
forest
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forests
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 and
river
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 for the construction of buildings makes changes on earth.
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, water bodies
are
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now
contains
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 unhygienic water.
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, human discoveries like cars and other motor vehicles emit carbon monoxide
on
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stratosphere
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the stratosphere
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 which will make cracks
on
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ozone
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the ozone
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 layers. There are many measures and policies
existed
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 for the reduction of
pollution
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, proper laws and penalty
brings
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an
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awareness among people and
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multimillionaire
multimillion
multimillioner
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 companies to accept the value of
nature
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. Even though, the government should adopt the proper curriculum for children to understand the importance of
protection
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the protection
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 of
earth
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, these instructions deliver a new lifestyle among youngsters. To illustrate
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, in Sweden the government introduced mandatory public cleaning training for children up to 13 years whereas it enhanced social responsibility among future citizens. Alternatively, world
organisation
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 and industrialists should clearly follow non-destructive and proper caring for
nature
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 with
regarding
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of
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 export and tariff structure. In conclusion, there is a saying 'a bird without wings'
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 humans cannot survive without
nature
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, all the Governments and reputed authorities take responsibility to bring positive change
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 the beauty of
nature
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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