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Film is a less important form of art than literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Over the past decades, the world has evolved and changed, especially in the notion and sentiment
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art
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. Some
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 say
film
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 is not as important as literature and painting. I completely disagree with
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 might have different aspects.
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,
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 essay will seek to examine the complex issue. On the one hand, I would like to point out that there are various reasons to consider getting advantages of
films
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. Before all else,
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 are more
visuable
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visible
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 obstacles than other types of
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. Due to the fact shown above,
people
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 with severe
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feeling
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 can even understand what is the purpose of a movie because it is easy to estimate the given lessons of a film from the acting and dialogue.
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,
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 can only feel the words in literature and only ingest the views and colours in the painting, and particularly, they need to imagine themselves to get what the artists mean.
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,
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the films
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films
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 industry becomes more and more developing in terms of financial wise.
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, I would like to express an equal view that why many
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 are feeling
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 as a less important form of
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 compared to literature and painting.
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,
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 tend to underestimate the importance of a film because they misinterpret how to assess an
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 piece.
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, they tend to measure the value of
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art
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 with
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 difficulty level of it, like how much time
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 to consume to get the exact idea of the artist.
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, despite the fact that the freedom of thought in novels and paintings
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 precious, the values of straightforward understanding in movies are undeniable. In conclusion,
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 we have different opinions and sentiments, I passionately believe that the awareness of
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 of
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 as
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art
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 should be enhanced in order to open up more remarkable entertainment
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 pieces.

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