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in spite of the many advances women have made in eduction and emplyment, they continue to be at a disadvantage when it comes to pay and promotion. in your view , what should be donr to promote equality of the opportunity for men and women in the workplace.

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Nowadays the attitude toward the role of
women
 in our community is changing in a promising way.
However
, there is still some sort of inequality when it comes to payment and promotion.
This
 essay will mention some solutions to overcome
this
 problem. It is undeniable that the woman is the half of the society, and it is our duty to ensure that all the
women
 in the world have all their
rights
 without any gender discrimination not only in education or employment but
also
 in the payment. To achieve
this
, the
emolyers
Correct your spelling
employers
 awareness of
women
’s
rights
 should be elevated.
This
 can be done through the establishment of numerous workshops and awareness campaigns targeting the employers to educate about the importance of the equality between men and
women
 and teach them that as long as the woman can do the same job as the man she deserves to earn the same amount of the money. A
second
 approach, governments authorities should impose a
work
 law to protect and guarantee
women
’s
rights
 at the
work
. Applying a fair
work
 law will force the managers and the employers to pay men and
women
 the same salaries.
For example
, in my country, in 2001, the
work
 low had been changed by including a new section about wages equality no matter the gender of the employee. In conclusion, it is extremely crucial to stand for
women
's
rights
 at
work
, and there are many ways to ensure
this
,
such
 as raising the awareness of the employers and making the salaries and promotions equality a legal requirement by the law for all the companies.
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