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The world has been an enormous increase in flights for leisure, business and commercial purposes around the world over the recent years. Why do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flights should be taxed more?

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In the modern world, there is
enormous
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 increase in
flights
. There are some advantages and disadvantages of these
flights
.
First
 of all,
flights
 are very convenient and
time saving
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. Whenever any person
have
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 to reach on an occasion, he can go by flight in some hours.
Moreover
,
flights
 are more comfortable to travel, because there
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 all
kind
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kinds
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 of facilities
in
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flights
 including food and sanitary facilities.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages as well.
Firstly
,
airplanes
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 are very expensive. A common man cannot afford them.
Additionally
, some people
not
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 feel much comfortable
to travel
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in
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on
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flights
. To conclude, we can say that there are both advantages and drawbacks
of
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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. So
flights
 should not be taxed more.
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