Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.

Many
people
thought that the
Internet
creates a lot of problems, despite
of
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its benefit. I strongly disagree with the statement because
Internet
can give many
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knowledge
for
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the user and make our work more efficient.
First
, the
Internet
can give
people
a plethora
information
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of information
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for creating
such
practical
benefit
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benefits
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for our daily needs.
In addition
, these
informations
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information
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can improve
ours
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skills to prepare our
favorite
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dishies
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dishes
quickly.
For example
,
last
week, my friend wanted to cook local's Indonesian food
such
as Nasi Goreng.
Fortunetely
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Fortunately
Unfortunately
, when she surfed on the
internet
, she got ingredients,
details
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procedures to make
delicious
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dish
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.
Thus
, the
Internet
will give users tons of information when they need it.
Secondly
, the
Internet
can give
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user
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users
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more
convinient
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convenient
and effective for
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their
jobdesks
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job desks
job desk
. The worker can do their job online from wherever
thier
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their
location
such
as home, hotel, or perhaps in
other country
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another country
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because they are using
internet
platforms.
For instance
,
on
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the pandemic situation
people
were
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to adopt
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Zoom meeting application for replacing conventional face to face
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.
Therefore
, the users will get easier on achieving their tasks. To conclude, regardless,
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drawbacks, I am certain the
Internet
can give
people
more knowledge and make the worker more
effecient
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efficient
on
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doing the job done.
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  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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