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Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.

#people #internet
Many
people
 thought that the
Internet
 creates a lot of problems, despite
of
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its benefit. I strongly disagree with the statement because
Internet
 can give many
knowleadge
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knowledge
for
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 the user and make our work more efficient.
First
, the
Internet
 can give
people
 a plethora
information
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of information
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 for creating
such
 practical
benefit
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benefits
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 for our daily needs.
In addition
, these
informations
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information
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 can improve
ours
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 skills to prepare our
favorite
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dishies
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dishes
 quickly.
For example
,
last
 week, my friend wanted to cook local's Indonesian food
such
 as Nasi Goreng.
Fortunetely
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Fortunately
Unfortunately
, when she surfed on the
internet
, she got ingredients,
details
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 procedures to make
delicious
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a delicious
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dish
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.
Thus
, the
Internet
 will give users tons of information when they need it.
Secondly
, the
Internet
 can give
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the user
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user
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users
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 more
convinient
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convenient
 and effective for
fulfill
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 their
jobdesks
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job desks
job desk
. The worker can do their job online from wherever
thier
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their
 location
such
 as home, hotel, or perhaps in
other country
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another country
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 because they are using
internet
 platforms.
For instance
,
on
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 the pandemic situation
people
 were
forcing
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 to adopt
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Zoom meeting application for replacing conventional face to face
meeting
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.
Therefore
, the users will get easier on achieving their tasks. To conclude, regardless,
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 drawbacks, I am certain the
Internet
 can give
people
 more knowledge and make the worker more
effecient
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efficient
on
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in
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 doing the job done.
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