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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#country #language
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 the percentage of families with electrical machines and the rate of hours that family members spend on house chores in one nation over a 100-year period from 1920 to 2019. Looking more closely at the graphs , it can be seen that over a century the proportion of washing machine owners and fridges owners are more than people who own vacuum cleaner.
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 amount of hours people spend on house chores in 1 week. According to the graph, In
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, the number of people
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 time on housework obviously decreased while in 1920 they spent 50 hours a week on house chores.
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 it declined steadily till
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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