In a number or developing countries it is difficult to recruit teachers to work in remote and rural areas and this can have a serious impact on education in these regions. Why do many teachers not want to work in these areas? What can be done to encourage teachers to take up posts in these regions?

It is known that there are many employment options for
teachers
in underdeveloped countries;
however
, the vast majority of
teachers
decline the
offer
because of the location. One of the main reasons why professors
teachers
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refute
refuse
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refusing
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this
type of
job
offer
is because they are likely to be far away from cities, and
therefore
far away from the comfort that cities bring with
themwith
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them with
.
However
, I believe that higher pay rates would significantly encourage
teachers
to accept offers in rural areas. Cities have many conveniences
such
as well connected means of transportation, a variety of
restaurants
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chains, the best medical service and a vast option array of entertainment. In order to move to rural areas,
teachers
need to give up
to
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these comforts, which is not easy, especially if they lived their whole lives in an urban area.
For instance
, if
teachers
decide to work in an underdeveloped area, they need to have a car in order to move from
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one
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place to another because of the lack of means of
transportation
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the transportation
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system.
This
means that they need to buy a car and pay for insurance and fuel.
Therefore
, the expenses get higher are increased compared to in the city. People usually take
job
offers if the income would entirely
covers
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entirely the expenses and
worth
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it. It is likely that a higher number of
teachers
would accept a
job
offer
in a rural area if the pay rate is significantly higher than the offers received within the city.
This
is the same as paying them more for the lack of the
citiyes’
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city's
cities
conveniences. They eventually do not have entertaining events throughout the week in the countryside, but at least they would have more money to spend on holidays. In conclusion, professors
teachers
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and teachers
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are unlikely to take a
job
in remote rural areas because of the lack of the city’s comforts.
However
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if companies
offer
high salaries for the
job
role,
teachers
are likely to consider and eventually accept the proposal.
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