There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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varies from place to place. While some prefer to hear traditional
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, others enjoy a more
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tune. I personally prefer to listen to my native language. In
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new. The spread of
music
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is a delightful development. It can teach us the culture and way of
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from places we have never even been.
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have never been to America, but through
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like
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can understand the structure of their society. It can
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help
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develop different languages. Since
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enjoyable activity
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don't even realise they are picking up new skills. It can foster the feeling of understanding between different
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from different areas.
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, the spread of different
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music
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can have a positive impact,
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not to say its more valuable.
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still need to give more attention and support to their local singers. Lyric sang in one's own
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tongue
can have a far greater reach. It can teach kids about their
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ancestors
. The history of the land they came from. It can help cultures survive in
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everchanging world. To sum up, I think
people
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having the opportunity to discover the different types of
music
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from all over the place is a good thing. But one shouldn't value others
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songs more than
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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