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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Music
 varies from place to place. While some prefer to hear traditional
music
, others enjoy a more
foreign sounding
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 tune. I personally prefer to listen to my native language. In
this
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dicuss
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discuss
 why some prefer similar sounds while other want
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something
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some thing
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something
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 new. The spread of
music
 is a delightful development. It can teach us the culture and way of
live
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 from places we have never even been.
For instance
,
i
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I
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 have never been to America, but through
music
,
i
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I
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somehow
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some how
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feel
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 like
i
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 can understand the structure of their society. It can
also
 help
people
 develop different languages. Since
its
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a
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 enjoyable activity
people
 don't even realise they are picking up new skills. It can foster the feeling of understanding between different
people
 from different areas.
Eventhough
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Even though
, the spread of different
countries
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countries'
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music
 can have a positive impact,
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that's
thats
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 not to say its more valuable.
People
 still need to give more attention and support to their local singers. Lyric sang in one's own
tounge
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tongue
 can have a far greater reach. It can teach kids about their
ancesters
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ancestors
. The history of the land they came from. It can help cultures survive in
this
 everchanging world. To sum up, I think
people
 having the opportunity to discover the different types of
music
 from all over the place is a good thing. But one shouldn't value others
countries
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countries'
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 songs more than
thier
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their
 own.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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