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Government should spend more money on medical research to protect citizens' health rather than on protecting the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently in the advice countries prefer medical research to protect citizen's health rather than protecting the climate it is an essential subject for union and people.In my opinion, the law should protect the federation and the environment together because they are relevant together.In
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 I am going to discuss
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 we must attempt to keep our status because I believe a dirty place is couse start a lot of illness
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 the state has to grow up culture about protect family and habitat and after ,that they should teach the crowd how they can improve their knowledge for saving fund and time society. In conclusion,for ,example if the community observe their own cleanliness and living environment can less going to the hospital they can save pay and time.and I completely agree that the regime spends
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 to protect the public and places not just for research to save the federation.
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