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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 Australian teenagers changed between 1975 and 2000. In1098 the
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. There was a dramatic increase in hamburgers and it reached about 29 in 1000 and
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 38 between 1997 and 1000. When it comes to
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 2999. It
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 2000, which was the least! Overall, the
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 1000, compared to
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 100.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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