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In many large cities, pelople waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion_on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can yoj suggest?

#cities #pelople #waste #hours #time #traffic #congestion_on #roads #yoj
It is more convenient for a large
amount
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 of people to
acheive
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achieve
 their
work
 at
home
 with their
comupter
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computer
 and telephone. As for me, I think that working at
home
 has more advantages than disadvantages, for helping save time
spending
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 on the way to
company
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the company
a company
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 as well as providing employees with a comfortable environment while working. In my
opinion
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 it is common that employees
spend
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 too much unnecessary time on their way to
work
 in
this
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these
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 fast-paced times.
Otherwise
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 they have to take public transport, which is a really terrible experience for the crowdy environment. All of these might lead to tiredness while working,
and
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apply
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followed by
their
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lower working efficiency
as a result
.
However
, if they are permitted to do their job at
home
,
then
tere
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there
 is no need for them to pay redundant
of
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energy on the transportation, but
work
mre
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more
 vigorously.
Furthermore
,
home
 is bounded to be a more comfortable
evnironment
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environment
 than
company
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the company
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. For most of
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the people
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people
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,people
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 they spend most of
rest
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their rest
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 time staying at
home
, so they are more used to staying at
home
 and will feel at
east
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ease
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.
Also
, homes are usually
more quiet
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quieter
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 than workplaces.
As a
result
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 it is more relaxed to
work
 at
home
 with less stress and feeling of
exhaution
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exhaustion
 and the employees will become more engaged in their
work
. In conclusion, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages
to
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 working at
home
.
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