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Today, more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

#people #case #traveler
Recently，it’s more convenient for people to
work
 at home as the
emerging
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 of mobile
phone
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phones
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 and
computer
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, which shows many advantages
comparing
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with
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 working in
company
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the company
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.
Firstly
, the biggest advantage is that people will
no
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 need to be trapped in
traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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 and arrange their time flexibly, like having more time to sleep.
Secondly
, we could easily choose a comfortable and quiet environment to
work
so
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 that
work
 efficiency will be improved.
Moreover
, people may take care of children as they stay
in
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home
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. Indeed, some necessary face to face communication or doing some
work
 offline may be very important and irreplaceable, but these cases may
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not occur
on
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 the majority. So, there is
a
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huge potential management for workers
specially
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 during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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situation
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situations
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. In a word, working at home
do
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 present a variable, stable and
muti-functional
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multi-functional
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 working schedule, which
broaden
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 people’s
work
 interest and enjoy the entertainment as their break time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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