Some people think giving time to career improvement is more important, others believe giving time to family and friends is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Setting up the right balance between

work

and family is becoming increasingly popular among young

people

and has gained much more scholarly attention.

Although

, the effectiveness of the topic is debatable as different

people

carry different points of view.

This

essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence of why both prospects are equally important for good

career

growth and mental peace. The debate surrounding the topic is most charged in today's world. There is an army of

people

convinced about giving more time at

work

than family. They have

also

come up with several arguments.

First

and foremost is, that

career

improvement can help an individual to have a better life ahead with secured finances.

For

example

,

people

these days often retire early by working hard and saving enough money for their future expenses. The

second

significant reason is age,

for

example

, as we start ageing,

people

tend to lose their potential to

work

hard, which makes them believe, that young age should

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wholeheartedly

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be wholeheartedly

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dedicated to achieving a well-settled

career

.

However

, some protest that

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Family and friends should be given more importance than

career

or

work

. They believe that family comes

first

.

For

example

, many organizations these days provide options for full time and part-

timetime

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time time

work

. So that employees can spend valuable time with their families and friends.

Moreover

, family is important for emotional and mental support as they say "money can't buy happiness". Which makes it clear the family should be prioritized

over

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work

.

For

example

, even after gaining success in business and

work

, many

businessman

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fails to get the happiness they deserve, because of a lack of family love and support. To conclude,

although

, both sides have merits and concerns, In my opinion, having the right balance between

career

improvement and maintaining

a good family relationships

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good family relationships

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has several favourable elements that

deserves

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attention.