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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. -explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

#work #company #six #months #head #office #country #-explain #company’s
How are you? Recently, the performance of sales in our region
have
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meet
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 a great promotion, following some new managing
challening
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challenging
 which disturbed me a lot. To solve
this
 problem, I would like to return our
headoffice
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head office
 for some help, the time will
last
 6 months. During
this
 time, I will take a lot of
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 that sets for
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 new manager like me. The aims are to improve our
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 skills and teach us some new
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 which can help us break the bottleneck. During my absence here, I will
arrangement
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 my work through the
intrernet
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internet
. The
clinets
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clients
 of mine will transfer to Johnson who will assist me to
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maintain
 the client relationships.
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,
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meeting
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 will be
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 by me to review the work outcome using the video meeting. I will make sure that the
opration
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operation
 of our sales department will not be
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effected
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. I am very pleased that if you can approve it and help me
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create
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creat
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such
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. If you see my letter for you , I am looking
forwarod
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forward
 to hearing
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 reply. Thank you! Best wishes!
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