In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families. Individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is generally acknowledged in a significant number of countries that fast
food
replace
traditional Correct subject-verb agreement
replaces
food
and it
brings disadvantages Correct pronoun usage
apply
on
families, each person, and society. Regarding Change preposition
to
this
, I believe that such
a trend is not always disadvantageous.
On the one hand, if people
only eat fast food
rather than traditional food
, national identities would be absent since food
is one part of the culture. With all people
eating the same fast food
, there would be fewer consumption of traditional food
and therefore
tradition would eventually disappear, and along with them, their cultures. Moreover
, fast food
is harmful for
Change the preposition
to
individuals
health. Fast Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
food
contains more preservatives and sugar than traditional food
. Not only can consumption of high sugary food
brings about obesity
, but it may also
contribute to other major health issues such
as type 2 diabetes. For example
, a survey conducted by OECD, the obesity
rate in Korea where people
prefer to eat traditional food
was about 9%, that in America where people
enjoy eating fast food
was approximately more than 30%. As example
clearly illustrates, eating fast Correct article usage
the example
food
instead
of traditional food
is harmful for
all of the public in the modern era.
Change the preposition
to
On the other hand
, fast food
is necessary in
contemporary society. Some Change the preposition
for
people
cannot afford traditional food
since cooking traditional food
requires more amount of time and money compared to fast food
. A lot of countries experience a recession and a lack of food
. What is more, people
to a certain degree, suffer from hectic
Add an article
a hectic
the hectic
schedule
, so some poor and busy families have to eat fast Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
food
. If fast food
had not been provide
, they would not have sustained their life. Change the verb form
providing
provided
Hence
, fast food
is indispensable for poor families. In addition
, although
traditional food
is healthier than fast food
, fast food
is not the origin of obesity
. For instance
, an experiment conducted by an American science teacher has
revealed that even though he had eaten only fast Unnecessary verb
apply
food
from Macdonald’s for 90days, he lost his
weight by 17 kg, and his cholesterol rate decreased as well. Correct pronoun usage
apply
As a result
, eating fast food
is acceptable.
In conclusion, while I accept that traditional food
can sometimes be rather important to maintain national identity and healthy
lifestyle, there is no doubt that eating fast Correct article usage
a healthy
food
is necessary for some poor people
. Additionally
, the brief that fast food
causes obesity
is a stigma.Submitted by hiasince38 on
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