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Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is more useful for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #television #education #entertainment
Some argue that
television
 programmes are considered
as
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a beneficial source for learning, while others agree that watching
television
channels
 are meant for entertainment.
Although
, there are specific
channels
 that focus on educating the viewer. But
this
 essay argues that most
television
 shows are aimed to allow
people
enjoy
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 watching their favourite shows and stay up to date with current affairs. There are a couple of educational
channels
 that inform the viewer in areas of interest they wish to pursue more knowledge.
However
,
this
 is not considered
as
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a reliable method for learning as most
people
 prefer to use
internet
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 when it comes to
studying
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 because of the vast sources readily available online.
For example
, students in the UAE prefer to use
Udemy
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 website and YouTube as
a
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support for their studies. Others say that watching
television
 is considered
as
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a form of enjoyment as it gathers the whole family to watch their favourite show and spend some precious time together.
Additionally
, there is a large number of
people
 who use the
television
 to stay updated with the world news.
For instance
, a study has shown that in
people
 Lebanon
view
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views
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 news
channels
 mostly on their televisions. In conclusion,
although
 there
are
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 a certain group who
prefer
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prefers
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 to watch the
television
 for learning purposes,
this
 essay finds that a large number of
people
 aim to watch programmes for entertainment.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • informative documentaries
  • interactive learning
  • entertaining content
  • reality shows
  • cartoons
  • intellectual development
  • parental guidance
  • screen time
  • creative thinking
  • educational potential
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