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The age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020

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Information is provided by a bar chart illustrating different ages of people living in Iceland from 1990 to 2020. One of the significant factors is that the aged 25-54 showed a notable upward trend and dominated the
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 each year. In 1990, approximately a
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 of the adult
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 lived, while the
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 aged under 14
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 was similar to adults in its percentage, at roughly one quarter. In 2010, the
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 of adults was nearly twice higher than the aged 0-14, at almost 40% and just over 20 %, respectively. Nearly a half of the
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 was aged from 25-54 in 2020, which was higher than teenagers and children, around 30%. Young adult (aged 15-24) was the
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 in 1990, at around 22%. After that,
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, it decreased consistently and became the lowest
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 of aged
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, at just under one in ten. The least of the
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 were the elders(65 and over) and aged 55-54. Both groups showed a similar period of stability. In 1990 and 2000, both these two groups had a similar
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, but the aged 55-54 was only
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 of the
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 of elders.

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