Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think of love, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
students
have to learn a variety of kinds of knowledge in schools. While some people believe that majoring
science
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subjects
may bring a promising future and
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others think that
history
can deliver the most knowledge to
students
, it is my opinion that
language
subjects
is
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the most significant. It could be claimed that the main reason is learning
science
subjects
can obtain more job opportunities in the future. Since
industrial
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revolution, people have been more focusing on developing technology which requires the employees
having
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science
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background.
In other words
, if
students
choose to major in
science
courses
in
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universities, they can ensure they will have a position in the related companies.
Secondly
, humans rely on technology
various
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way
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in daily life,
such
as
agriculture
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and medical products.
This
means that learning
science
can help to develop new inventions. Others believe land
history
is the most important subject because
history
not only trains
students
to think logically but
also
avoids mistakes
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before.
For example
, the former can show the causes and the results so
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learners
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leaners
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learners
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can connect the relationships between incidents. The letter can be understood by analyzing, which means learners can dodge the same situation which occurred in the past.
Furthermore
, if the same mistakes happened, historians can
also
predict the future by the similar results in the
history
.
However
, the main reason that I believe
language
subjects
is the most irreplaceable is that
language
is the foundation of all
subjects
. Teachers convey
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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by
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languages
and different kinds of studies are
also
written in various
languages
. In brief, if learners master as many
languages
as they can, they can receive more knowledge from a variety of nations.
On the other hand
, research has shown intellectuality can be reflected
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how many
languages
are mastered. Regardless of
science
or
history
subjects
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they all need to be understood through
languages
. In conclusion,
although
all the
subjects
are important, the
language
subjects
are above the others.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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