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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workforce. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Over the
last
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 decade, the way of working has been changed, and the number of
employees
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who prefers
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prefers
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 to
work
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home
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 is drastically increased, especially, in the
last
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 three years due to the pandemic. Some individuals believe that
work
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 from
home
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 culture allows workers to spend quality
time
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 with their family, on contrary, certain citizens are
in
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an
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the
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 impression that
this
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 culture
bring
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brings
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 stress to the
home
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.
As per
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 my perspective,
such
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work
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a work
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 environment helps salaried
employees
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 to spend quality
time
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 with their
family
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families
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. In the following paragraphs, I explore my detailed analysis of both
the
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apply
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views.
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 with, employers across the globe enforce the new policies to provide
flexibilty
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flexibility
 for their
employees
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 to choose
the
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work
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 location.
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,
this
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 will help
employees
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 to save the
time
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 that
spent
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is spent
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to commute
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 to
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office
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the office
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everyday
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 which leads to less traffic and air pollution.
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, I am working from
home
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 for my company
from
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for
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 the
last
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 five years which saves me
everyday
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every day
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 three hours
travel
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of travel
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time
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 and
also
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 as I
not
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do not
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 use my vehicle it reduces
the
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air pollution and traffic.
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, due to
such
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culture
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a culture
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 workers get more
time
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 to spend with their family and
also
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helps
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help
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environment
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the environment
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 by reducing the pollution.
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, some people
though
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thought
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 they have an option of
work
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home
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 they
commutes
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 to
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office
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the office
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 for various reasons like, to meet and greet the team and for the
infrastucture
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infrastructure
.
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,
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office
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the office
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 environment will never have
a
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downtime for services like internet, telephone and power.
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,
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office
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the office
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 provides ergonomic desks and chairs which will help associates to stay fit.
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, due to uninterrupted services and healthy sitting these people are less
stressful
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stressed
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 during their
work
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. In conclusion, the new generation
have
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 the
flexibilty
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flexibility
 to
work
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 from
home
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 or either from the
office
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. If you have good
infrastucture
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infrastructure
 with zero downtime services at
home
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 I prefer to be working from
home
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 rather than
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office
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an office
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 which provides me
an
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with an
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 opportunity to spend extra
time
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 with my family.
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