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Buying fashionable clothes is wasteful because people don't need new clothes all the time.Clothing should be bought and used more wisely. Do you agree?

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Introduction
Being fashionable and gorgeous is setting a new trend in the whole worldwide, especially, among youngsters.Youth is getting crazy over
the
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things which
helps
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 to look good as well as unique from others.For
this
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 purpose, They spent plentiful
money
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 on shopping
unnecessary
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for unnecessary
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 items which are not required at that particular time.
This
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 essay will describe the fact that whether it is wise to
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spent
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huge
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a huge
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 amount on these kinds of
stuffs
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stuff
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 or not.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with,
Countries
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countries
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 like India are facing
enermous
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enormous
 problems due to
lack
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a lack
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 of funds
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 as failing to provide full employment and education that hinders the so many benefits which a nation needed for its development.
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, it affects the overall progress of the nation. Among these
negatives
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 one of the most crucial is poverty due to which a huge number of locals lack some basic
amenties
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amenities
 that they are unable to feed themselves.
Body paragraph 2
While, On the other side, Some people are having too much
money
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 to waste on the new clothes that they don't
needed
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need
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. In the race of looking unique and
trendy
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 they forget the real situation and spend a large amount of
money
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 on wasteful products. In my opinion, Clothing should be bought and used more wisely as in many cases
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for
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 example, People already have clothes to wear
in
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at
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 a party but they prefer to buy
new
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a new
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ones
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one
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ones
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 to
attraction
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attention
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 of others
towards
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them.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I would say that
young
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 generation should think a while to waste
money
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 on these things and rather help the needy person with that
money
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.
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, Parents should
also
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 take an
initative
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initiative
 to
taught
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teach
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lesson
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lessons
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 to their
child
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children
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 on
this
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 matter which
furthermore
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 helps in
longer
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 time in the economic development and its growth.

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