Some people think that big companies should provide sports and social facilities for the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Given the pivotal role of passion in occupation, the question of whether people should opt for unemployment rather than working but not interested . One common perspective of many people, myself included advocates the opinion that it is more necessary for individuals to be unemployed than to be employed but not enjoy. Opponents of
this
thinking cite the fact that salary is the key consideration when selecting a career because the unemployed can not earn money in order to secure their basic needs
such
as supporting their parents or working out bills each time hanging out with friends. In the worst-case scenario,
this
can result in strained relationships and isolation.
Nonetheless
,
this
thinking fails to factor in the fact that in the unemployed period, individuals can expand their horizons,
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knowledge in their passion careers, which will be valuable and useful for them in seeking potential jobs in the future. That being the case, they can gain both financial conditions and dedication to
work
with passion. What is more, if everyone has to
work
jobs they do not enjoy, it can lead to undesirable impacts on their physical and mental health for a long time. The
testment
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testament
treatment
for
this
can be seen in those who are obliged to do occupations they are not fond of, they can have negative feelings
such
as
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, tedious and losing inspiration in
work
. That being the case, employees will not contribute their skills and expertise to a great extent for
work
leading to working less productively, which affects directly negatively on their enterprises and society. In conclusion, with the aforementioned, it is undeniable that being employed despite not interest comes with several advantages in the short term, but I believe that people should choose unemployment in order to seek a more appropriate job in the future, which can bring positive benefits that far outweigh the undesirable affects the unemployed period brings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
  • health and wellbeing
  • community relations
  • goodwill
  • economic benefits
  • loyalty
  • boost local businesses
  • resource allocation
  • employee satisfaction
  • public facilities
  • core business operations
  • financial returns
  • government responsibility
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