The government should reduce the amount of money spent on local environmental problems and instead increase funding into urgent and more threatening issues such as global warming.

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issues. Some believe that public finances should be directed
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a more serious
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such
as global warming. I completely disagree
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global
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warming complications are caused by pollution. Since
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the industrial revolution of the
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been a massive shift to expand infrastructure
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cutting trees which
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to a slight increase in the world's temperature ranges. One way to solve
this
is by locally imposing laws to promote tree planting.
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, funding from the
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of Environment of Oman has directed financial assistance to
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trees and making gardens will help with the negative impact of deforestation resulting
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increased oxygen concentrations coming from greenery.
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temperature increases.
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solving environmental problems will enhance
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quality of life. Air pollution from carbon dioxide emissions from
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cars
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caused a lot of health issues to people at the moment. In fact, some companies like tesla actually pioneered the usage of electricity as an alternative to fossil fuels so that breathable air would be available to city inhabitants.
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turn, lead to a healthier population as well as a
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footprint society. To conclude, I think public administrators should support projects that try to mitigate environmental issues because
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solving smaller scale problems which would lead to the eventuality of solving a larger scale threat to the environment
such
as global warming.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urgent issues
  • global warming
  • local environmental problems
  • funding
  • redirecting funds
  • broader environmental health
  • financial efficiency
  • return on investment
  • cost-effective
  • holistic approach
  • moral and ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • long-term consequences
  • short-term impacts
  • competing environmental concerns
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