Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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shape from just a piece of paper in the form of drawings. Some people consider
arts
as an obligatory
subject
but
other
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are not in the favour of
this
idea. I would agree to keep
arts
in the schools but as an additional
subject
. To put forward the positive sides of Fine
Arts
as a
subject
, I would like to mention that it helps to increase
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with the help of increased creativity which would indirectly
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the
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brain functionality.
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Furthermore
, the course can provide an
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opportunity
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relaxed
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time
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students. They can keep on creating designs without having much burden on their brains. But there are opposite views
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the
subject
as well.
Although
,
arts
can be used as a medium to enhance creativity
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many people would consider it as a
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waste
wastage
of time because making drawings does not have any connection with
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theoretical or practical knowledge. Majorly parents want their children to study the core
subjects
of their domain and excel at them rather
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engaging themselves
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the work which may not help them to build their
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. Another point in the same direction can be supported by the fact that our brain always wants to be in
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comfortable position, and students, most often, take
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of their advantage. They would keep themselves busy with the easy
subjects
like
Arts
, so that they would not have to struggle with a bit difficult courses
such
as Science, Maths. My opinion is not based on either
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of the discussion. The
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institutes
should consider
arts
to be taught in the schools but not as
a mandatory
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mandatory subjects
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subjects
.
This
would not only help in enhancing the cognitive skills of the learners but
also
give them enough time to
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with crucial
subjects
. To conclude,
arts
should not be recognised with an idea of
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subject
but it should be treated as an additional option for the holistic growth of the upcoming leaders.
Submitted by Mannpreet Kaur on

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