Some people believe that preserving the natural environment is crucial, however, most make no effort to do so. Why do you think this is happening? What are some simple actions that could help the environment?

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the natural
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not care the natural
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environmental
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did not attention to environmentally, biodiversity would be endangered.
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that lead to global warming. By
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imperil living species.
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not have enough training about
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environmental
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dumping rubbish into a
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can lead to
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pollution
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and jeopardize
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animals.
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in the sea might
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garbage and
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to adversity for habitat
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animals.
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for the
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is about lessen
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of the most important
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taint. By
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air
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contamination.
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can use public transport for their commute
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levels of
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pollution
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. Being environmentally friendly
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to protect living species and biodiversity.
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should use sustainable products. Sustainable products do not disrupt biodiversity and it would be retrievable. In conclusion, there seem to be vital reasons
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environment
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society
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and community do not have enough knowledge and information about environmentally.
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some practical
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influence on
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contamination and being
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