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Some people believe that children at secondary school should be streamed, i.e. taught in classes according to ability, rather than being taught in mixed-ability classes. Do you think the advantages of streaming children at secondary school outweigh the disadvantages?

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The pie chart illustrates the career
choices
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 of Brighton University's 2019
graduates
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, giving the percentages who worked in each of various sectors after finishing university. Overwhelmingly, industry and government were the most popular
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. Just under
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 the students went into industry, with service industries attracting more Brighton
graduates
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 than any other sector by far — almost a
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 (33.0%). About half that number (16.3%) took jobs in manufacturing. Politics and public service were the
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 most popular choice, accounting for nearly a fifth of
graduates
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. Just over 12% went into politics and a
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 5.6% chose the civil service. The other significant career
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 were education (about 15%) and two others: transportation and warehousing, with 7.8%; and science and technology with 7.3%. The least popular
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 included work in the charitable sector and careers in sport, both of which were chosen by well under 1% of
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.
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, 2.8% entered work in other, unspecified, sectors.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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