Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?

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can cause by COVID-19
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two years, teenagers have to stay at home and only use social
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because of COVID-19, so COVID-19 must be reduced as soon as possible for socialising and public health.
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activities to make them more comfortable to communicate with others and find some activities that can do only
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  • curate
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  • social anxiety
  • digital detox
  • tech-free zones
  • mentorship programs
  • real-world interactions
  • face-to-face settings
  • in-person participation
  • promote
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  • foster
  • appeal
  • perspectives
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