The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In the recent era, the majority of individuals are being suffered from environmental issues. These situations could not be handled by only a few folks,
consequently
, the government and the large organisations ought to be involved to protect the
environment
. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
statement as a combined effort of the administration and large businesses could protect the
environment
from deterioration. To commence with, it is absolutely true that the authority has a big responsibility to solve the
environment
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issue in their country
that is
facilatited
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facilitated
by large organisations.
For instance
, Global warming has been happening since the early 20th
centuary
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century
and it has been breaking the
atmosphare
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atmosphere
. Nowadays,
weather
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is completely changing day by day, people could not
be predict
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the weather and range of seasons. Due to
this
reason, the administration should be worked with the National Geographical group to make a plan to cultivate the trees in
subdistrict
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.
As a result
, it is clear that to solve the environmental problem we need to be a big
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that it cannot be done by
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a citizen
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citizen
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.
In addition
, the authority and big businesses have the power to reduce the
environment
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problems.
For example
, offering subsidies to electric vehicles to promote the use of renewable energy sources for transportation, drafting strict policies on industrial waste disposal and so on are some steps taken by the administrators across the nation to protect the mother earth. To conclude, the intensity of
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issues has reached
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at
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a
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peak point,
thus
, only
masses
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cannot solve these problems, the authority and large businesses join
hand
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hands
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together and work towards the common goal of reducing the damage to our
environment
.
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