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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But, others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or tat they find the most interesting. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Studying is an integral part of
teenagers
 because it affects their future occupations. Nowadays
students
 learn more than 10
subjects
 including computer skills. Some people believe that
teenagers
 should focus on all
school
subjects
, whereas, others argue that
teenagers
 should concentrate on the
subject
 that they feel most interesting
or
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 they are good at. In
this
 essay, we discuss both views ,
then
 my opinion will be described. On
one
 hand, many citizens insist that
teenagers
 should focus on every
school
subject
 since all
subjects
 give
students
 general information and it makes an adult who can work any kind of a job with
high
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 salary. According to
a
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research conducted by the Japanese government in 2020, adults who learned all
subjects
 in
school
 get 35 per cent higher salaries than others who did not.
Therefore
, it makes clear that
teenagers
 should concentrate on all
subjects
.
On the other hand
, a large number of people believe that
teenagers
 should learn the
subject
 that they are interested in or they are good at for making
students
 with special talents.
For instance
, many Japanese who took Nobel prise tended to study or research
one
subject
 when they were young.
Moreover
, Mitsuo Yosikuni;
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one
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a
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the
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 famous researcher at Tokyo
university
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University
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 has shown that
students
 who
focuses
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 on
one
subject
 have a tendency to be good researcher, scientists and artists.
Thus
, it became clear that
teenagers
 should study the
subject
 that they love. Both sides have the advantage for
student's
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students'
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 future in a particular way.
However
, I believe that
teenagers
 should focus on all
school
subjects
 because only a few people can get a talented professional like an artist and a scientist, whereas, it is important to learn all
subjects
 to get various information for the
mojority
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majority
 of the
students
. After a thorough analysis, it is suggested that the Japanese government should make a better education system for teaching all
subjects
 in an effective way.
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