In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Crime is a major problem in our society,

currently

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the number of criminal cases is growing among countries. I think there are different causes for

this

increase in crime and each one must have a good investigation to solve it. Criminal acts have always existed in our lives and we try to keep them under control with laws and justice. Every country has its own

sistem

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system

about it and not all of them are successful. In my

opinion

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the most relevant cause of crime is the penal

sistem

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system

and

then

education.

First

of all, I will talk about the penal

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system

of my country as an example. I believe that in Spain we do not have a good legal institution. We are weak with the punishments and rely on reintegration. It is

demostrated

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demonstrated

that in many cases,

this

is not

posible

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possible

, most

of

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the criminals do not know about change;

moreover

, we reward good behaviour very early so many offenders think that it is profitable to

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a few years in jail and

then

get out without any impact.

Therefore

I think one of the causes is our too permissive system. As a

second

cause

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I mentioned education because I believe it could be the way to prevent many criminal acts. Often, delinquents have a high drop-out rate from school.

In addition

, they might have difficulties at home

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their

family

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such

as financial problems and even

psycholigycal

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psychological

traumas. A bad childhood could cause troubles in the future. In conclusion, we need to improve two aspects, on the one

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our legal system for punishment without

second

chances and

on the other hand

to ensure a good education for all children.