Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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One can not deny the fact that achievement of something motivates one to do more all the time
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I highly agree that getting higher
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at
school
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is a motivation to
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of all, we all have witnessed how parents used to be happy with our high scores at
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which
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encouraged us to
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them with even a huge improvement,
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Furthermore
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children that are getting higher
grades
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at
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have high
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compared to the ones with low
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because of their known achievements so that means it helps to improve their
leaning
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process.
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, it is undeniable that
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can be hectic and stressfully but when these children work hard and get higher
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they must be rewarded for their good work
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so that in future they will take
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extra mile in order to get impressive results
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be awarded again.
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, when l was in high
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, I remember my mother buying me a laptop because l had done great at
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, and that has been my motivation since
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that I should win in
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every thing
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I do,
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l do all the hard work nowadays at the back of my mind having an award . To sum up, I agree that good results are a jump starter to the learners, with
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support of their parents and teachers, additional, these pupils need to do extra studies and lesson.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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