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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many
region
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 can earn lots of
money
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 from tourism, and global
sports
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events
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 can bring people and
money
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 to the
host
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countries
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.
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, some
population
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populations
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 from many
countries
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 want to be a
host
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 of international
sports
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events
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.
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, some population thinks that the
countries
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 which are the
host
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 of international
sports
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events
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 will
cause
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 more
problems
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from
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 being the
host
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. In the following paragraphs, the supportive reasons for each idea will be outlined in detail. The
countries
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 which are the
host
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 of global
sports
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events
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 will have many
problems
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 from open their
countries
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 to attract the
tourists
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. Most of the reasons come from cultural diversities and different laws of each country which can
cause
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 small
problems
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 to crimes, like a word more people more
problems
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.
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, the
host
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countries
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 will spend a lot of
money
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 on
sports
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stadiums
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 development and the buildings that can attract
tourists
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.
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, the
host
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countries
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 of global
sports
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events
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 can earn lots of
money
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 from
tourists
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 that come for global
sports
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events
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 because it is
international
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an international
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 event which can attract
tourists
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 all over the world to travel to their
countries
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.
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, the
money
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 that spends on
sports
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stadiums
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 development and attractive buildings will be upgraded
the
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 city another step. In conclusion, which
countries
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 can be the
host
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 of global
sports
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events
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 can
cause
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 many
problems
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 from opening their
countries
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 to attract more people, but they can earn lots of
money
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 from
tourists
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 and cities will be upgraded. The
countries
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 that have the chance to be the
host
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 of international
sports
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events
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 should accept it because the
events
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 will
cause
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 more benefits than
problems
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.
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