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More and more serious crimes seem to be committed each year. Some think that the death penalty is the way to deal with this problem while other people think different measures are more likely to be successful. Discuss both options.

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There is no doubt that due to the current problems in society, crime has increased. In essence, any felon must know that doing mistake and do not repeat it. The reasons for the worrying trends need to analyze. There are diverse ways
such
 as capital
punishment
 and diverse measures for criminals. Some people believe that capital
punishment
,
also
 known as the
death
 penalty is a
state–sanctioned
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practice
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 of killing a person as retribution for horrible crimes like murder.
Death
 sentences may only be imposed for guilt in which a victim is killed, but state legislatures can determine what specific circumstances make a murder eligible for a
death
 sentence.
Furthermore
, execution can reduce government spending. Maintaining a person who harms society or other individuals has costs to the state
for instance
 the cost of living and education in prison. Other people think, that killing another human being is wrong everywhere morally.
Although
 even he has seriously violated the law. In
this
 way, governors provide rehabilitation and social reintegration of prisoners; corrected for new good life
also
 their families can be cheery beside them.
Moreover
, the opportunity again to reform the offender may be a fundamental variable in his life and he is being lawful and honest. It has been seen many times that delinquents had a good life after passing courses in reconciliation
centers
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 and succeeded and even helped others in
this
 regard. In conclusion, I believe laws should be implemented in the most proper way that does not allow the offender to commit violent acts. It is the responsibility of the government authority to stop citizens. Capital
punishment
,
also
 known as the
death
 penalty, is a state-sanctioned
practice
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 of killing a person as a
punishment
 for a crime.
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