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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subject that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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There is a debate that some people believe
university
students
 should study
subjects
 that they like, while others think those
students
 should learn useful
subjects
 related to science and technology in their career life. I tend to agree that
students
 should allow choosing whatever they want. Those people who believe that
students
 have opportunities to choose whatever they like argue that
students
 have the ability to decide what they want to do in the near future.
University
students
 should have options to decide on their
subjects
 as they have to take responsibility for their own lives as adults.
For example
, people who are interesting in arts and sports would want to be sporters and artists in the future. For those
students
, If they are only allowed to learn science and technology, it would be painful for them. While it's reasonable to only let
university
students
 learn useful
subjects
 related to technology to some extent. Due to fierce competition nowadays, young generations usually have to earn their livelihood and plan to find decent jobs.
Thus
, they have no choice but to waste their time only preparing for their
careers
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 life from
university
. It would be useful for them if they can master office skills.
Besides
, those
students
 who study computer science and data analysis can find better jobs with higher salaries easier. In sum,
although
 scientific
subjects
 are beneficial for careers in the future,
students
 should be free to decide on their life. Scientists play a vitally important role in the world, but every social role contributes to society. Universities should respect the choices of every student.
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