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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, there are different opinions regarding teenage conflicts with
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their
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, Some of us think it
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 an important factor to raise
children
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 while some of us see it as a negative impact. Teenage is
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a crucial
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 period for
children
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 where they develop their own views &
opinion
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.
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Conflict
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The conflict
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 between
parents
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 &
children
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 is
common
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a common
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 phenomenon in
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 period as
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 become
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overprotective
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over protective
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overprotective
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 of their
child
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 &
children
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 crave for freedom in every possible way. We will discuss both
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views
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 below in the paragraph.
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a parents
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parents
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 point of view, Teenage
conflict
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 is important during
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 stage as they are more protective of their
children
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. It is important for them to know
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the whereabouts
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 of their
child
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,
there
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 friend circle etc.
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Moreover
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 it is one of the important
period
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periods
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 where a
child
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's career is taking shape, it is important for
parents
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 to keep their
children
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 more focussed even if they are of
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a different
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opinion
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.
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, Teenage
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 can
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 have negative impacts on
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child's
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a child's
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 future. Constant arguments or
difference
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differences
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 of
opinion
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 can result in loss of confidence in
children
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. It might
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 affect
there
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their
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decision making
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decision-making
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 capacity. It can
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 play a vital role in shaping their social well being as they might get confined to their home due to constant
difference
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differences
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 of
opinion
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 between themselves & their
parents
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. It can
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 impact them on
emotional
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an emotional
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 level. In my
opinion
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, it is important for
children
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 to have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to express their opinions & thoughts freely to their
parents
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. To conclude, considering the emotional & mental well being of
children
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 in their teenage years it is important to avoid teenage
conflict
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 as it might leave a
long lasting
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 impact
over
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 a
child
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's mind.
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