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Q. Some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. What is your opinion about that?

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There has been a debate about how to teach students the topic "agriculture". Some of them
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favor
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 of teaching
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agriculture
 as an act. I think that would be a good
aproach
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approach
 to show students how to grow
food
 and cook it at
schools
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.
Agicultere
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Agriculture
 is a very serious
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lifetime
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life time
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 subject. We should consider it as much as we can. Early age
aducation
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education
 should take it seriously and show pupils how to deal with vegetables,
furits
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fruits
,
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nutrition
nutrients
nutrions
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. It is always the best way to teach them as a practice. If they know how to grow a vegetable, they will understand it better. In
this
 case, plating fruit or
vegateble
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vegetable
 would be
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one of the easiest
way
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 to make them learn how much effort we should put
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 it. After all of
these
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 learning, they would
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see
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agriculture
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different
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 perspective. After all of
these
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 learning in a practical way, they will never waste
food
.
Moreover
, they understand how to
comsume
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consume
 it with respect.
However
, if we just let them read about cooking or planting a tree, they will get the basic
locig
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log
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 of it. Beyond
of
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this
 understanding, they wouldn't know how hard it is for us to have something on our plates. Education is always the golden key. If we teach people how to grow
food
 and make it ready for eating in practice, it will make much sense for them. Due to
these reason
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 above, we should have it a lesson at schools. In
conculusion
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conclusion
, there wouldn't be
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 that much so there would be enough
food
 for everyone. In
this
 new are, under these circumstances
such
 as
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ecosystem
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, air
polution
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pollution
, it has been hard to plant a tree. Being well aware of
agriculte
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agriculture
 turns people
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a
restpectfull
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respectful
 consumer.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutritional education
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Life skills
  • Curriculum
  • Extracurricular
  • Sustainability
  • Organic gardening
  • Culinary skills
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Agricultural knowledge
  • Food literacy
  • Home economics
  • Hands-on learning
  • Sustainable farming
  • Kitchen facilities
  • Environmental stewardship
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