Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
21st
century has seen the rise of social media and online streaming media. One of the main reason entertainers Correct article usage
The 21st
such
as film Linking Words
stars
or sports Use synonyms
stars
Use synonyms
are
being paid soo much Change the verb form
is
money
. There are Use synonyms
multibillion
deals signed between streaming Correct your spelling
multi-billion
medias
and Correct your spelling
media
sport
bodies Change the noun form
sports
such
as English Premier League. These sports bodies earn soo much Linking Words
money
from these streaming Use synonyms
medias
because people buy their subscriptions just to see these sports Correct your spelling
media
stars
.
Fans are crazy for these Use synonyms
stars
and want to copy them in every aspect of their life. If Use synonyms
these sportsman
or musicians Change the determiner
this sportsman
these sportsmen
advertized
a brand, the popularity of that brand will increase which will reflect on their sales and Correct your spelling
advertised
it
will increase the sale of their brand. These sales will help them in earning Correct pronoun usage
apply
alot
of Correct your spelling
a lot
money
. So they are investing in these Use synonyms
stars
and paying them Use synonyms
alot
of Correct your spelling
a lot
money
only to earn more Use synonyms
money
. Use synonyms
For example
, Cristiano Ronaldo, who is a very famous footballer currently Linking Words
paying
for a football club Manchester United is being paid approximately 1 million Euros weekly, which seems to be very high. But Correct your spelling
playing
on the other hand
, his club is earning 5 million Euros weekly by only selling his merchandise.
So, Linking Words
i
totally disagree with the people who think that Change the capitalization
I
stars
are being paid too much Use synonyms
money
. It is a free market, so if a business can afford Use synonyms
paying
Change the verb form
to pay
his
employee too much Correct pronoun usage
its
money
, it shouldn't be a problem for anyone.
Use synonyms
In addition
to Linking Words
this
, teachers should be highly paid Linking Words
but
based on their Correct word choice
apply
qualification
. Because teachers are the base of Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
developing
Replace the word
development
a
nation. Without good Change preposition
of a
teachers
you can't Add a comma
,teachers
develope
a Correct your spelling
develop
prosper
nation. But surely they can't be paid as much Replace the word
prosperous
stars
are getting paid because it is not possible. But governments can help them by providing Use synonyms
Correct pronoun usage
them with
with
special social benefits.Change preposition
apply
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