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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when traveling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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Advancement in technology has surely helped everyone in one way or the other.The booming IT sector has enabled many company employees to
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 from home or while travelling. I strongly believe that its advantages overpower its consequences.
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, Many workers who had to travel a lot because of their workplace being in a different state or city , now can save the
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 commute and
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 peacefully at their homes which will eventually increase their productivity at
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.
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,if A person living in a remote area has a job in the countryside , It will be difficult for him or her to travel daily to the office. But now with
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 from home is a possibility people are not required to travel every
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.
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, whenever a person travels to a hill station to spend some leisure
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 , He or she can carry just their laptops with them and in case any urgent requirement comes they will be able to handle them from anywhere.
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 is an environment we are familiar with and we can spend some
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 with our families and not feel isolated . To sum it up, working from home has its pros but we must take into account its cons as well .
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