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Technology is destroying social interactions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Technological advancements heated up in the recent century. These improvements in the tech field gave us the freedom to communicate much easier than any time before.
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 caused some disadvantages for our socialisations. I believe, technology leads us to choose a
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 lifestyle and made us idle. To commence with, today many use their smart devices to contact each other
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 practice may ease the social connections but undirectly led us to a
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 life. Now many people used to communicate online through smart devices which
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 reduced face-to-face meetings and most of humankind's socialisation is through
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 sort of meeting. When individuals would not get the chance of meeting new people around them when they rely on tech.
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, many workers nowadays are used to working from home and
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 means not visiting any co-workers and less possibility of having a real communication in online-based jobs. To resume with, most people select to communicate via technology because it is more convenient.
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 may lead them to choose a short telephone call
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 of meeting in a restaurant where they may have a higher quality
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 rather than a 5-minute voice call. Even though today users can make video calls but they may never replace the other closeness and communication factors like touching or understanding the body language.
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 benefit of technology in our life but in my ,mind
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 sort of technological advancements made us less social and inactive in communicating.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual interactions
  • weaker social bonds
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • shallow relationships
  • reduced empathy
  • nuances of emotional expression
  • counterargument
  • physically unable
  • cross-cultural exchanges
  • interpersonal skills
  • communication technology
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