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You recently bought some food at a supermarket, but, when you got home, you found that the food was in bad condition.

#food #supermarket #home #condition
Dear Sir or Madam: My name is Olivia. I was in the supermarket where you work, yesterday. I finished my job late but when I was going
to
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home, I saw the supermarket
opened
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. It was around 9 p.m. so I had only 15 minutes to buy my dinner. There were a lot of people there,
however
, there was not much food. Suddenly, half of the lights turn off. I understood that the shop was closing so I took some bananas and a piece of meat as I
was be
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 able to
did
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 it and went to pay. When I was at home with my lights on, I saw that the food that I just brought was unusual. Both products were dark and smelled bad. I cannot understand how you
sale
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 products in
this
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 conditions.
This
 is the
second
 time I have bought food that I cannot eat because it is not in good
conditions
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. I would like to know how you will try to solve
this
 problem. Looking forward to hearing from you
with
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this
 solution. Regards
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