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Managing global environmental issue should be handled by one organization on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your ideas

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Managing
environmental
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the environmental
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 crisis is of utmost importance in the current scenario because the irresponsible behaviour of
one
 country can prove to be detrimental to the entire world. Since
environment
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the environment
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 is shared by everyone around the world, we cannot risk its pollution. As the environmental
issues
 of climate change, rise in temperature and melting of glaciers are posing a threat to the
sustainence
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sustenance
 of the world, management of these
issues
 becomes vital. Making
one
organization
 responsible for environmental
issues
 on a global scale would lead to centralization and often misuse of authority.
Hence
, I disagree with the opinion that the global environmental
issue
 should be managed by
one
organization
for
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apply
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the fact that
monopoly
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a monopoly
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 will eliminate competition and thereby decrease the scope for improvement.
For
instance
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 in
case
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the case
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 of waste
management
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,management
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 if the only
organization
 responsible for handling the
issue
 fails to deliver
their
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its
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 services due to any reason, the
issue
 remains unsolved and the authorities are well aware that there is no pressure from other organizations and
hence
 people will be left with no other option but to suffer the consequences.
Furthermore
, the vast geography would translate to a lot of
issues
 to be handled by
one
organization
 leading to
burden
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a burden
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 on the system and piling up of cases to be resolved and expected delays in resolution.
Hence
 decentralization in terms of management of environmental
issue
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issues
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 should be implemented in order to ensure timely action and prevention of natural disasters.
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