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some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #hobbies
There are some different
opinion
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opinions
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 about doing
hobbies
. Some people think hard activities will end up
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unfinished
 and others
however
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, some like me
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believe
 the
dificulties
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difficulties
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does
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not
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 mater.
firstly
, the
hobbies
 which are difficult
may be
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maybe
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 not even resumed as they are too hard to follow. As our brain
designed
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 to effectively works when only
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concentrates
in
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 one task and not dealing with
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multiple
 issues. For
exampl
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example
,
hobby
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the hobby
a hobby
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 of collecting traphels needs lots of
patent
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patents
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 and long
destenation
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destination
 walking
this
 could change a
persons
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person's
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 mind as it is too difficult to stick to it.
Therefore
mostly
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most
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peope
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people
prefre
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prefer
 easier
hobbies
.
secondly
, some difficulties may stop the person from resuming the
intrested
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interested
hobby
. Take financial difficulties as an example, playing tennis is an
expenive
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expensive
 sport many
wish
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wishes
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 to attend to tennis
clases
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classes
class
 and resume it as a
hobby
.
However
, as
this
 activity is a
costy
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costly
cost
 one many simply could not
affored
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afford
afforded
 it.
Therefore
, difficult activities may reduce one's passion for that
hobby
. In the way of
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conclusion
,
hobbies
 are important for our daily life and when they are hard to do they may end up unfinished and
this
 could stop people
doing
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from doing
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 the activities they like.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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